Hi @MrPajamaPants , Thanks for posting in the critique forum.
Okay easy enough.
Okay. So first I need some more information, so you can help us help you. And while you do your homework I'll get started on your critique, and as I'm working on it I will update it according to your answers.
Can you link or share a style guide? Meaning, is there a specific art style that you want to emulate? A goal that we can help you achieve to show you what you need to learn? And I mean, what you want your drawing to look like when you are done. And I dont mean like a certain movie. That is too vague. Link a specific sheet of professional development art from arstation or equivalent. Something meant for visual development for character art, since that is what we are critiquing here. We need character art for green light pitch meetings.
In the meantime browse some of the art critiques on the forum, I try to be super informative so look for my little zombie head. And if you are going to write and direct you need to be able to do the same thing if people are drawing for you as a director.
(Edit: Reworded) Here's a few notes till I get the other info I need to help you with. I'm trying to be funny and not hurtful. These are gut reactions people in the industry might think but not say cause they might try to be nice.
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(Edit: Added) Overall your characters look a little elongated, and their incompleteness make it look like you don’t know how to, or don’t want to draw feet. The clothing is either very skimpy or super sexy tight with no natural draping tendencies. The light color and shadow are not really able to critique until you show me a style guide to push where you want. Right now it’s just a little, “colored in”. Mainly I would push you to learn how to manipulate a simple mannequin to learn proportions manipulation. I would also push you to master perspective and foreshortening . Doing those is a real pain trust me. But it’s worth it in the end.
I recomend moderndayjames, and I cannot recomend enough https://cubebrush.co/foundationartgroup for fundamentals for someone who doesn't have time for school.
Once you upload your style guide sample/s I can help you with the light and color.
It will take me a day, maybe two to complete the lesson.